"Ash lifted a hand—it seemed right to do that even though Carolyn had never done it."
Human obsession with magical gestures! Lolz. I've poked fun at that in my books. I find it hilarious for some reason.
"Ash, you didn’t just hit a vein, you hit a line of Bright I didn’t think existed anymore in Penthya. It was something much stronger than anything Carolyn has attained." Mary Sue incoming. Or I don't know, between this and Justice (which I was giving a pass because magic sword), maybe she's already here and just touching up her makeup before her performance in the big battle.
"Mrs. Baker" Guessing this is a mistake because Emily ain't married...is she?
"a sword as black as night. He came for me after they said I wasn’t the one. He and the sword, they…they were beautiful and scary." So Ash has good magic sword, Peter has evil magic sword. Ash has good Poppa Henry, Peter has evil Sara, setting up for duel between siblings?
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"Ash lifted a hand—it seemed right to do that even though Carolyn had never done it."
Human obsession with magical gestures! Lolz. I've poked fun at that in my books. I find it hilarious for some reason.
"Ash, you didn’t just hit a vein, you hit a line of Bright I didn’t think existed anymore in Penthya. It was something much stronger than anything Carolyn has attained." Mary Sue incoming. Or I don't know, between this and Justice (which I was giving a pass because magic sword), maybe she's already here and just touching up her makeup before her performance in the big battle.
"Mrs. Baker" Guessing this is a mistake because Emily ain't married...is she?
"a sword as black as night. He came for me after they said I wasn’t the one. He and the sword, they…they were beautiful and scary." So Ash has good magic sword, Peter has evil magic sword. Ash has good Poppa Henry, Peter has evil Sara, setting up for duel between siblings?
"YOU SHALL NOT PASS!" incoming.